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Clare writes inspirational romance, usually of a suspenseful nature. Her books are available through her publisher Pelican Book Group and Amazon. She is married with three kids and lives in the UK. She loves watching sci-fi, crime drama, cross stitching, reading and baking.

Saturday, 13 March 2010

harder than it sounds

I've caught so many errors already. Writing someone who is deaf from their pov is a lot harder than it appears. For example -

A bang almost like a firecracker, came from just behind him and he jerked, shock written across his face. Another bang. Then he fell sideways landing on Dinah. She dropped her phone, the camera going off again as she did. Automatically she cradled the dying man, landing on the floor with him.

So what's wrong with that? She's deaf, she won't hear it.

So it becomes.

A flash came from just behind him and he jerked, shock written across his face. Another flash. Then he fell sideways landing on Dinah. She dropped her phone, the camera going off again as she did. Automatically she cradled the dying man, landing on the floor with him.

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